AS 91397B annotated exemplars

This annotated exemplar is intended for teacher use only. Annotated exemplars are extracts of student evidence, with commentary, that explain key parts of a standard. These help teachers make assessment judgements at the grade boundaries.

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For Excellence, the student needs to demonstrate perceptive understanding of significant ideology(ies) in the classical world.

This is an extract from a larger submission of work. Within the whole submission, the student uses supporting primary source evidence of specific relevance.

The student demonstrates perceptive understanding of the political ideology of the Augustan principate. The student uses primary source evidence which is specifically relevant to the points made (1).

The student uses literary and artistic evidence in the response. The student analyses a range of aspects (2) – military, political in terms of the relationship with the senate and the limitation of military accolades as well as the ways in which Augustus’ political ideology was propagated during the principate. The student shows insight into the political ideology (3).

Reasons for similarities and differences in the opinions held by the father and son are explored in the dialogue. The points made which explore the cultural expectations of Romans and codes of behaviour for Republicans before the principate during Octavian’s rise to power are insightful.

For a more secure Excellence, the student could:

• consider primary source evidence which does not favour Augustus to get a more balanced response
• show discernment regarding limitations of sources of evidence.

For Merit, the student needs to demonstrate in-depth understanding of significant ideology(ies) in the classical world.

This is an extract from a larger piece of student work. Within the whole submission, the student uses supporting primary source evidence of specific relevance.

The student demonstrates in-depth understanding of the political ideology of the Augustan principate. Throughout the response, there is use of primary source evidence of specific relevance to support the points made (1).

A range of aspects of Augustus’ political ideology, constitutional reform, propaganda in art and literature and military reform are covered (2).

There are instances where the student shows some insight into the political ideology (3), but these lack sufficient development to meet the criteria for Excellence.

The points made regarding Augustus’ relationship with other power figures establish a theme, but this would need further development.

To reach Excellence, the student could:

• develop reasons for similarities and differences in the opinions held by the father and son in the dialogue
• more firmly establish themes and patterns in the political ideology of Augustus
• identify cultural expectations and codes of behaviour to demonstrate a perceptive understanding of the political ideology
• show discernment regarding the limitations of sources of evidence.

For Merit, the student needs to demonstrate in-depth understanding of significant ideology(ies) in the classical world.

This is an extract from a larger piece of student work. Within the whole submission, the student uses supporting primary source evidence of specific relevance.

The student demonstrates in-depth understanding of the political ideology of the Augustan principate. The student uses primary source evidence of specific relevance (1).

The quotations selected are well explained and integrated into the response. The student analyses a range of aspects of Augustan political ideology (2).

The points made regarding his use of pre-existing powers, the first constitutional settlement and use of the army allow the student to give an informed analysis of the political ideology expressed through the principate.

For a more secure Merit, the student should explore points in more depth.

For Achieved, the student needs to demonstrate understanding of significant ideology(ies) in the classical world.

These are extracts from a larger piece of student work. Within the whole submission, the student uses supporting primary source evidence.

The student demonstrates understanding of Augustus’ political ideology, using primary source evidence throughout the dialogue to support points made (1).

The primary source evidence used by the student is of specific relevance and the use of supporting evidence is at Merit level.

The student analyses constitutional and military aspects of Augustan political ideology (2), but could have covered a range of aspects such as the use of propaganda, religion as a political tool or the changes in political ideology within Augustus’ own lifetime.

The student relates the ideology to the wider context of Rome (3).

To reach Merit, the student could:

• cover a range of aspects
• explore points in more detail to demonstrate an informed analysis.

For Achieved, the student needs to demonstrate understanding of significant ideology(ies) in the classical world.

This is an extract from a larger piece of student work. Within the whole submission, the student uses supporting primary source evidence.

The student demonstrates some understanding of the political ideology of Augustus. Aspects of the ideology of the Augustan principate have been covered, such as the changes to the constitution through new and modified titles and powers and the modifications to the structure and powers of the senate and the need for a legitimate successor to his powers (2).

However, the student does not go beyond these to consider other aspects of political ideology such as the use of propaganda, religion as a political tool or the changes in political ideology within Augustus’ own lifetime. Many points are just stated without the detailed analysis required for a higher grade. Primary source evidence has been used to support points made, but this is sporadic (1).

For a more secure Achieved the student could:

• explore points in greater depth
• use primary source evidence more consistently to support points made
• more clearly relate Augustan political ideology to the wider context of the Roman world.

For Achieved, the student needs to demonstrate understanding of significant ideology(ies) in the classical world.

This is an extract from a larger piece of student work. Within the whole submission, the student uses supporting primary source evidence.

The student demonstrates limited understanding of political ideology during the Augustan principate. The student selects but does not use primary source evidence (1).

Large excerpts of the Res Gestae Divi Augusti have been given, but the selection is not explained or used to demonstrate understanding of the political ideology of Augustus.

Some valid points are briefly mentioned (2), but not developed or expanded sufficiently to meet the standard. The student cannot demonstrate understanding of Augustan political ideology, therefore there is insufficient evidence to award an Achieved overall.

To reach Achieved, the student could:

• explain and analyse the primary source evidence to demonstrate understanding of the political ideology of Augustus
• explore points in more depth
• relate the ideology to the wider context of the Roman world.